October 2009

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Re-discovering Dignity by: Karee Nour

Re-discovering Dignity
 
It began with a poem, so I find it ironic that its how our love ends.
For so many years, words have been my closest friends.
Their flowetry teaches and guides me in what I should do,
So I turn to them once more to be guided from you.
 
I told you I missed you and that I loved you as well,
But I don't really think you were prepared for this wealth.

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Have I ever?

Have I ever
made you feel
like you deserve to feel?

Have I ever
said the words
I really meant to say?

Have I ever
done anything at all
to deserve your love?

 

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freeform
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my garden

dreading the worst, i stepped into my garden

steeling myself for a situation grave...

after lastnight's rainblast

fearing for my saplings small

big ones did not merit my fear

but stood still I.....

the saplings seemed refreshed as after a coffee

big ones shone with greenery,

if green could

and the lawn seemed perfect

 

 

I need not fear...

as almighty cares

I need not fear for my young ones too

as the Almighty that cares for THEM

cares for MINE too

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English

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I AM WHO I AM.

SURE, CONFIDANT, NO WORRIES, LOVE ITSELF.

UNDERSTANDING, GENEROUS, KIND AND SINCERE.

EVERYTHING THAT IS MISSING FROM THE SOULESS SPHERE.

MINDFULL, EDUCATED, A VERY AWARE PROTECTOR.

LISTENER TO THE CALLS OF THE RAPED, AND THE RAPER.

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THE EYE'S OF THE FALLEN

What am I doing, I would like to know why you are so happy.

When I gaze into your exsistance, your ora radiate's magnificance.

To much for me to stare, though I am fixated.

The creators blessings on you, rampage's my emotions.

What am I doing.

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wild life of fantasies[continuation]

 

Freinds if at their are any grammatical mistakes , I request you to forgive me and kindly let me know whatever should be changed. to follow the previous part of the story you can visit my account and have a look at it.

 

 

 

UNACCEPTABLE TRUTH

 Unacceptable truth

“He wasn’t  normal”,

 Words were out without

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Weight

your face blooms, open
and I swallow the feeling from my joints
down to my stomach
to spill and spread,
or cling there, between my bones.

there is a hollow in your chest,
where your ribs split beneath flesh and the hair that spills like oil across it -
and you are open here.
eyelashes and nose and tongue
buried between your bones
and calm with knowing where you are.

Take away the skin between us,
like peach skin, bitten and ripped away
so that I can feel the fingers that build your hands
pulling at me –
so that my bruises are your fingertips.

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Twitter Lists

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