Maa....(from my heart)

Ambar pe banke tara tu reh gayi ma, dhunde tujhko meri nigahe yaha-waha, tere mere bich me hai baadalo ka pehra, dhunda maine tujhko jab kyu aaya sabera.. de deti koi saja mujhe jab main teri baate na maana tha, door chali gayi tu mujhse jab tune mujhe anchal me chipana tha; dhundu tujhe ambar pe jab din dhale, sochkar ki aakar mujhe tu lagayegi gale... udte hai subah jab panchi ambar me kehta hu unse aaye tujhe saath lekar, chot lage mujhe ya ho dookhi main gire tere ansoo baarish ki bunde bankar, sabki ma aaye milne har roz yaha, par tu na aaye ma kaisi majburi hai waha? tutkar aaye kayi taare zamin pe par tu na aayi ma kya khafa hai mujhse? dhundali zindagi me bas teri kami hai ma zindagi bhi ye bas bani thi tujhse; mujhko pata hansa karti hai tu dekhkar mujhe, rehna hai tere anchal tale kaise bataun tujhe...

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