Read like a discussion to me... But I did like the thought... :)
The concept of God starts where man's scientific vision ends (that is how I look at it). I've written a poem in similar lines.... it's called "My Restful Notions"... I would request you to take a look at it... any be we can collaborate and come up with a poem together...?  :)

Respectfully,
Amartya

PS: People call my kind athiest... I don't know why but that's what I'm called... N m proud of my views :)

I agree with both you and amartya.

I believe in God, because I believe the concept of a Higher power, allows for an uncomplacent view on life. God for many of us is the unanswered question's that we grasp for answers at in the dark. Hence, my view on God is this, we human creatures are capable of most anything given time and shared efforts, eventually controlling many if not all aspects of life with-in the known universe.... keyword "known"... The concept of a higher-power will in turn, keep us humble and keep us searching for improved methods of existence.

As far as the poem goes, I feel your execution was a tad bit rushed. Perhaps, your showing us a concept your going to develop more?

I see the beginning of something more elaborate, develop it further.

The one line that I feel actually takes away from the poem:

"I overcame obstacles like a melting pop sicle.

I know that don't make since, but man look at prince."

I get the gist, but a politely point out that this feel's like a cheap trick or at the least requires elaboration to be relevant to this rest of the piece.

my suggestion:

I overcame obstacles, like summer melts popsicles or 

the lost recognition when prince changed his name.

My reasoning for this,  the original lacked flow and relevance. I personally, would remove the prince line to make it more universal, as this poem would fall under "the human experiance" category of poetry.

ALso, I am well aware that my critiques sometimes have an unwanted "harshness" to them. I think you have a very good idea, my only real suggestion is to refine it.

I think "I overame obsicles like a melting popcycle" line is completely awesome!!  Seriously, that was VERY poetic to me.  Incredidbly deep and vuleranable.  Yet with a greater scope of understanding that weaknesses in yourself, even emabarassing ones, may be denied by some, but we all have them.  Over time you can learn to put the right lines together as advised above.  I believe you the kind of connection to poetic creativity and deeper thinking that one simply cant coach in another.   Please keep writing!

Mocit

I think the whole poem was on a great thought...good work