February
I asked you to wait
Some years you never missed a beat
Loving me I turned blind to
Too scared to see
What may have turned to be.
Now that you’re back in my life
I see you in a different light
Brighter than the one I used to
Shining I see only you
Breathing, my heart beats what’s true.
Then the time came
You’re now ready to fly
Leaving me in an abyss
How could I have been so stupid
Not realizing what I have left for bid.
Finally realizing how much I love you
Tell me if there’s a chance to change what’s melted
I can’t let you go that easy
For my heart’s in line
Hurting and torn in your heart’s vine.
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Good one
You look too young to be writing these kinda matured poems... ;-)
my fav lines
Now that you’re back in my life
thanks
thanks so much. when i'm inspired, I do a lot of writing. =)