Beautiful Death
(This was my first poem ever... Critically it was literally ripped apart 
)
Death must be a beautiful experience;
So calm, so composed – the promise of permanence and certainty.
A feeling of eternal bliss
and hope of entry into an uncomplicated entity.
Such serenity, calm and solace.
An uncomplicated existence.
A state where one is never subjected to heartbreaks and disappointments.
A place where none is worthless.
An uncomplicated existence.
A state where one is never subjected to heartbreaks and disappointments.
A place where none is worthless.
Tears, pain, poverty, hunger,
pressure, desperation, depression, race and war,
are known only to souls trapped in their mortal effigies.
I envy the ones who are free
from this numinous conspiracy.
pressure, desperation, depression, race and war,
are known only to souls trapped in their mortal effigies.
I envy the ones who are free
from this numinous conspiracy.
(2 votes)
Tony is that you?
Seriously, your style and structure remind me of my friend (I like, his and yours) . If it's you Bro, I'm glad your still writing, it it ain't .....Stop copying my friend...hehe J/K
Numinous conspiracy.....Just wow! Nice nice ending! Like a stilleto heel right in my ear, but it feels good somehow.
Loco
Thank you kindly
...
M not Tony... I'm ur friend nevertheless...
Regards
Me
looks like a beatiful garland
looks like a beatiful garland for death..good..will solace people near death :)
looks like a beatiful garland
looks like a beatiful garland for death..good..will solace people near death :)
reading your poems on death,
reading your poems on death, i am afraid i may start awaiting death
its ur first poem
nw thats faar better amartya.
nice poem
live for nothing...
Nice work bro
Hey, Wen i read this poem, i
Hey,
Wen i read this poem, i can think of a smooth, calm river flowing endlessly to its destination. Death is such a harsh word but here it looks calm and smooth, almost welcomin n beckoning.
Good work!
Vini
I will intrepret this as the
I will intrepret this as the description of life after death :-) where life traps your soul for some years and then death comes and sets us free forever :-) .
Excellent lines ...buddy :-)
Great poem, Death is never
Great poem, Death is never the ending but a new beginning of another life.
Not what I expected from the title
I thought this was going to be rather the oppossite to what it is instead you deliver serenity and peace that comes from death...a kind of hope for the future tomorrows....who knows? great write to make your reader think a while...