Doesn't feel like.........

doesn't feel like stayin calm anymore
feelings rise from the ashes
and tickles my heart's core

doesn't feel like staying mum anymore
words travel from chest to brain
and my hands find someone to adore

doesn't feel like staying numb anymore
drops come till there and stoned
and my eyes find those 2 eyes that lured

doesn't feel like staying alone anymore
for glimpse of that pretty face
closes my eyes porch
and stares at the goddess of darkness and sore.

doesn't feel like living without my soul anymore
its gr8!! a part of me is with her
but urge is to get it back before I knock the heaven's door!!

though i'm nt sure, will it be heaven's or hell's :)
jAs

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jack the ripper's picture

jAs...

nice read :)

Amartya

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hey

thanx!

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vinita_rk's picture

Hello   The first thought I

Hello

 

The first thought I got when I read the last line of the poem is..

'So simple n true'

It was simple, straightforward and matter of factly put, good work!

 

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@vinita

thanx vinita!!!

 

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prema_nair's picture

hii

frankly i liked it..... i thnk there was a lot of feel 2 it whc was really nice & even then it was quite straight 4rward..

thanks,

Prema

 

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thanx!!! I think if we

thanx!!!

I think if we can say anything straight, nothing like that.

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