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Submitted by jAs on Sat, 05/30/2009 - 16:52

So lil time, so many words.
So big sky just 2 birds.

So lil wings, so big flies.
So many smiles just a few cries.

So small eyes so big horizon.
On this long lonely road just one turn.

So many feelings just one heart.
So many endings just one start.

So many acquaintances, just a few frendz,
A few tears, more than enough for these poor hands.

So many words, just two ears.
So many challenges just one fear.

So much of sharing, so lil calm.
So much of love, however, just 2 arms.

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hi

Submitted by prema_nair on Sat, 05/30/2009 - 19:32.

i liked the poem. the concept was rocking good.                                  i loved the way it ends

"So much of sharing, so lil calm.
So much of love, however, just 2 arms."

these two lines were really lovely.

Keep writing

thanks,

Prema.

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Submitted by jAs on Sun, 05/31/2009 - 15:01.

prema

thanx for appreciation....

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The rhythme is soothing

Submitted by LocoGLitch on Sat, 05/30/2009 - 22:20.

I like the back and forth between positive and negative thoughts it feels like waking up. That moment just before conciousness when your "becoming aware" and you start to worry about your day but are hugged by a loved one whos waking as well.

 

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hmmmmm

Submitted by jAs on Sun, 05/31/2009 - 15:02.

while writing i didn't think of positives and negatives....
bt u pikd them up....thanx for disection...he he...

thanx
jAs

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i liked ur poem, would u

Submitted by ratnaprabha r raykar on Sun, 05/31/2009 - 17:13.

i liked ur poem, would u check out mine

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sure

Submitted by jAs on Mon, 06/01/2009 - 14:18.

im chking yor stuff...

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