exposed
How many dudes would say
They kissed a picture on new year's day
Right at nighttime noon, underneath the kabooms
Only witnessed by the stars and the moon
... my heart was in that smooch
Our lips were pressed to a count of thirty-two
Seconds
It coulda been longer-- that's a guess
I did have a sip of patrón first...
Could this situation grow worse? I doubt it
I just aint think at this time I'd be without her
I fought wit everything in my power to keep her from runnin
But it was another guy who made her heart flutter
-- That knowledge made mine shutter, but still love her
We'll enough to pucker up to my Sidekick
... Where her picture resides in
So I inquire again-- how many guys would admit
They spent their first seconds of '09 like I did
... probably just me-- my pride needs no defense
I mean I wanted more from her... but that was all I could get
KG
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Kalvins...
LOL.. i have done such stuff many a time in my life too.. so I'm exposed too 'eh... LOLLLLL..
The politics of love, appeasement of your partner is the mantra.. Either you appease her or someone else will..
Well written.. Let 'em coming, dude..
Please comment on some poems.. Would love to see what you feel about some of the other poems..
Respectfully,
Amartya
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Glad to see i'm not the only one!!!! thanks for reading!!! and consider it done-- i'm finally gonna explore the site now that my laptop's runnin right!!! see you around!!!!