the light
In the beginning you were a sparkle in my eye
A world I wanted to explore, but was too far for me to try
To reach
Wit my curiosity already skyrocketing
I wanted to blast off, but somethin was stoppin me--
The past wanted to cop a ride wit me
So I tried to abandon it, tried many many ways
But the only one that worked was seein that pretty pretty face
That fired me from Cupid's slingshot, at the speed of desire
I was breezin through space, leavin the stars behind
Wit my mind surrendered to reality, I let my heart be the guide
Because not only does it know where, it knows why
That's why when I got there, it was no surprise
Other than your hand holdin mine
Where the passion flowed through to cure the glow inside
Shining wit hope-- theres no more heartache hurtin me
Because the love I let go has returned to me
As you.</p>
A world I wanted to explore, but was too far for me to try
To reach
Wit my curiosity already skyrocketing
I wanted to blast off, but somethin was stoppin me--
The past wanted to cop a ride wit me
So I tried to abandon it, tried many many ways
But the only one that worked was seein that pretty pretty face
That fired me from Cupid's slingshot, at the speed of desire
I was breezin through space, leavin the stars behind
Wit my mind surrendered to reality, I let my heart be the guide
Because not only does it know where, it knows why
That's why when I got there, it was no surprise
Other than your hand holdin mine
Where the passion flowed through to cure the glow inside
Shining wit hope-- theres no more heartache hurtin me
Because the love I let go has returned to me
As you.</p>
KG ©
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freeform
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Language:
English





wow
As always ur wrks are very gud and after reading them i feel gud.keep going on explore evry possibility of imagination n invasion to write.
LAvanya
ditto
your comments are astonishing. preciate you stoppin by