wildfire
The flames galloped wit a quick sprint
Leavin nothin in its shadow but imprints
Makin ashes of everything in me that didn't fit
N dazzlin all that is significant
Like the style of my love, a signature in cursive
Vindicated on the hearts, some souls who've earned it
To preserve them from this scaldin marchin
These adverse times have brought upon me
Without warning... made my vision smokey
This rollin fog shows the unknowing me
Maybe holds who I'm supposed to be
Standin in this glowin heat
Heroically embracing this destruction in me
To save my faith hope n love from ending
Because when the steam from the embers is done ascending
I wont be who I was in the beginning--</p>
Leavin nothin in its shadow but imprints
Makin ashes of everything in me that didn't fit
N dazzlin all that is significant
Like the style of my love, a signature in cursive
Vindicated on the hearts, some souls who've earned it
To preserve them from this scaldin marchin
These adverse times have brought upon me
Without warning... made my vision smokey
This rollin fog shows the unknowing me
Maybe holds who I'm supposed to be
Standin in this glowin heat
Heroically embracing this destruction in me
To save my faith hope n love from ending
Because when the steam from the embers is done ascending
I wont be who I was in the beginning--</p>
KG
Style / Type:
freeform
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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How was my language use?
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Language:
English
You write like a master
but i fear this one i dont get.....it's written well and great form...but i dont get what your trying to say.....maybe you can help me understand?...sorry for my ignorance...:)
SA
sorry i took so long! :(
it was jus my way of sayin things are about to change in widespread manner. out of my control, i can only rescue wat parts of me I can. no need to apologize! im jus glad you read! :D