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Submitted by lavanya b on Thu, 05/14/2009 - 23:13

I see a child dreaming about outer world in mother's womb........

I see a child crying to leave mother's womb........
 
I see a child enjoying warmth and unconditional affection of his mother.......
 
I see new born being dropped in dust heap mercilessly.......
 
I see dropped child crying for the hunger of love of the mother..........
 
I see child evolving into a man.........
 
I see man fighting with other people for meager things............
 
I see man loosing his civic sense..............
 
I see destruction,mammoth,bloodshed............
 

I see a child thinking of never leaving mother's womb and live in this dreadful reality rather live in beautiful dremaing world................. 

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HI

Submitted by PriyaNair on Fri, 05/15/2009 - 04:52.

5 points to the Poetic Thought...

I am not an expert in judging the technicalities of a poem...What I like is what I feel once i have read it...You definitely get a high score there...

Yes this world can be very very depressing with all its negativities around....and surviving here could be harsh....Very lucky are those who could escape this trauma and lead a HAPPY, CONTENT life...

Wish you one such life,

Priya

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Thanx

Submitted by lavanya b on Sat, 05/16/2009 - 08:21.

Iam gald to know that people can understand what i saying them coz sometimes i myself cant get it though i try very hard to get it understud[:d]

I wish for both good and bad and try to judge my capability myself.

 

i wish you all a very good life with some difficulties so that u can rather live life full extent rather just spend it.

 

Regards,

Lavanya.

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HI LAVANYA,

Submitted by loveulife on Sun, 05/17/2009 - 01:29.

There is something very cute and innocent about your poem

The fear that a childs mind feels, and the comfort zone which even adults want to have lifelong.

Good writing....keep on writing more and more and express all your thoughts........i wud like to read them

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A good poem at least as far

Submitted by madhukar7002 on Mon, 05/18/2009 - 00:21.

A good poem at least as far as the thought goes. Technically however, the effort could have been better.

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