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Submitted by leannlaughlove on Thu, 02/04/2010 - 08:52

My nails worn down to the quick,
As the clock slowly ticks.
With each passing day,
I wonder if your letter
Will make it my way.
Do I ever cross your mind
When you’re out there,
Training for the front lines?
Do you ever think of me
When you’re out there,
Becoming all you can be?
You’ll never know
Just how much I hated
To see you go.
You’ll never know
Just how much my adoration
Was beginning to grow.
I’ll never know
If you feel the same.
This is all
One big guessing game.

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leannlaughlove

Submitted by lavanya b on Fri, 02/05/2010 - 12:22.

 I dont know about whom its been mentioned here but my imagination was conflicted into 2 things.

1.is this a mother's feeling towards his son who has been sent far away frm her r he has joined army or something else.

2.is it a lovers guessing interval of her lover being far away and getting exposed to many diffrent things and she is sceretly hoping for her lover not loose his love towards her.

In both ways u have expressed it very well dear and keep posting ur wrks.

LAvanya

Thanks!

Submitted by leannlaughlove on Sun, 02/07/2010 - 04:07.

It's actually about a guy friend of mine who just went off for basic training. I like him a lot...but he doesn't know that. :/ Thank you so much!!

all d best

Submitted by lavanya b on Mon, 02/08/2010 - 10:24.

 i dont know should i advice or not but feeling are never to be controlled better u express urself and rest is just chance.

 

LAvanya

Yeah...

Submitted by leannlaughlove on Tue, 02/09/2010 - 02:58.

Yeah...I'm just really shy and I don't want to say anything and be rejected. I mean, I don't really think he has those kinds of feelings for me and I don't want to ruin what we already have. Ya know?

Great flow

Submitted by ellabella on Tue, 02/09/2010 - 12:01.

 And I love the last line.

Thanks!

Submitted by leannlaughlove on Wed, 02/10/2010 - 08:42.

Thank ya, thank ya! :)

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Submitted by LocoGLitch on Sat, 02/20/2010 - 02:49.

Hey Leagh,

I work with soldiers from every branch of the US military... You ever thought about sending this poem to him?

All I know is that guys in the service are always happy to be remembered by those back home. If you don't feel like expressing your true feelings, you could still show him how you feel by subtling revising this into a "friendly, thinking of you poem". I just know that mail delivery and phone call time for guys in the service is one of the ways they stay grounded. Military life is rewarding but very stressful and in certain situations very lonely.

 

 

 

Hey. :)

Submitted by leannlaughlove on Sat, 02/20/2010 - 02:57.

I've really never thought of sending it to him. I'm afraid he might think it's a bit strange that I'm sitting around writing poems about him, haha. I wouldn't know how to get in contact with him anyways. He asked for my address before he left and I haven't heard from him yet. It hasn't even been a month since he went away though, so I try not to worry too much. Hopefully, he'll write soon. If he hasn't forgotten about me...