Idle Engineering
This mechanized man,
made of copper cog questions,
has analyzed plans to coinciding equations,
nil figure found
in final summations.
Discrepancies round this data made life.
He and fellow machine
Were built on technologies flawed.
A battery,
constructed alkaline thoughts
merged with acidic lucid dreams.
The circuitry,
cables laid close to bone laden structural beams.
Insulated with carbon based meat,
lubricated by crimson oxygen grease;
but programmed deprived
by shy prime directive.
Inefficient with time
and quite surely self destructive.
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freeform
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Language:
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