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I WROTE A SONG YESTERDAY

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Submitted by Malik Ismail on Wed, 12/30/2009 - 22:27

CLOUDY IS THE STREAM OF KNOWLEDGE THAT ONCE WAS OVER FLOWING AND PURE.

THE SUN REY'S WILL SHINE THROUGH, WILL THE SUN REY'S EVER SHINE THROUGH AGAIN.

MY HEART WAS CAPTURED AND THE CLOUDS CAME.

CAN YOU SEE THE PURITY, CAN YOU SEE THE STREAM.

SO I WROTE THIS SONG YESTERDAY, TO REVEAL MY INNER MOST HEART.

SIMPLE , BUT WILL YOU UNDERSTAND, CAN YOU UNDERSTAND, MAY YOU UNDER STAND.

I LOVE YOU.

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WOW

Submitted by reema on Fri, 01/01/2010 - 14:39.

WOW.. VERY NICE SONG AND A VERY HAPPY NEW YEAR 2010.. TO YOU..

REEMA..

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Thank you Reema

Submitted by Malik Ismail on Sun, 01/03/2010 - 01:57.

As always you courteous words hit there mark, and a very Happy and blessed New Years to you as well.

 

Malik Ismail

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Hi

Submitted by Pritam on Fri, 01/01/2010 - 19:00.

Hi,

            Yr song is soothingly pure......content is truely  perspicuous ...... only I wud  xpect that you wud add one or two more stanza to it.....the title,although long looks very appropriate... keep it up....

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Thank you

Submitted by Malik Ismail on Sun, 01/03/2010 - 01:59.

Your absolutly rite and I will do just that Pritam

 

Malik Ismail

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