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Submitted by prema_nair on Sun, 05/24/2009 - 22:35

 

 
 
 
 
I Found Friends
 
I was walking all alone
On this bizarre path
Looking around for someone
Waiting for a companion
 
I walked & walked
With no one around
The path looked lonely
And the road seemed long
 
And then at a distance
I saw someone
Or were they more than one
Wasn’t clear in the fog
 
I ran towards what I saw
Fearing I’ll loose them.
My prayers were finally heard
 I was no more alone
 
They saw me coming
& waited for long
I was very slow
But they never walked away
 
We met, we blend
We laughed together
I was happy like never before
All my efforts seemed worth
 
Similar thoughts, similar tastes
Walking together with similar aims
I have finally found,
What the world calls ‘friends’
 
 
 
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jack the ripper's picture

Wowwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!!!

Submitted by jack the ripper on Sun, 05/24/2009 - 22:49.

What a transformation... You are a FAST learner... I must confess... This looks to be written by a very exprianced poet... believe me...

I liked the simple and leasurely thought process.  Friends are important and no one wants to walk it alone... Life is a LONG road... If a group of poeple are destined to be friends then it will all work out well finally the friendship has to succeed...

Best of luck... Very well done...

Amartya

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really sweet n simple n heart

Submitted by vinita_rk on Mon, 05/25/2009 - 16:57.

really sweet n simple n heart touching. isnt it true how a heart always warms up when there's somebody who loves us and accepts us for who that we are.

i really liked it as every single person wud feel the same way like how 'yOU' did in the poem.

keep it up,

vini

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Very well done!!

Submitted by joe on Mon, 05/25/2009 - 17:06.

Change: blend  > blended [ need to keeep past tense]

 

I'll = I  iwll  change to "I'd" = I would.  In English "would" is the past tense of "will."  OHERWISE A GREAT JOB!!!!1

 

Joe

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Mocit's picture

I like it

Submitted by Mocit on Mon, 05/25/2009 - 22:27.

Very heartfelt.  Nicely written.

 

Mocit

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vinie d pooh's picture

Nice

Submitted by vinie d pooh on Tue, 05/26/2009 - 02:15.

I liked this one...

Nice work...

keep up...

Vinie d pooh

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hi

Submitted by loveulife on Mon, 06/01/2009 - 11:38.

good work

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hi such a happy sounding

Submitted by ratnaprabha r raykar on Tue, 06/02/2009 - 13:11.

hi

such a happy sounding poem, u took me back to my child hood days

                                                                                        prabha

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Wow...

Submitted by LocoGLitch on Thu, 06/04/2009 - 04:37.
Similar thoughts, similar tastes
Walking together with similar aims
I have finally found,
What the world calls ‘friends’

the subtle rhyme that happens with tastes and aims is on par with the greats. very profound ending.

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Good one

Submitted by Museem on Fri, 06/05/2009 - 21:45.

Hey Prema

Great piece of literature. A really great poem and i second Joe on the fact that you should avoid those "chat lingos" (or is it Short Hand words) of i'll and i'd.......expand them it makes the work of words beautiful....remember we are lovers and promoters of beautiful words first and poets/writers second....

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hi every1

Submitted by prema_nair on Fri, 06/05/2009 - 22:03.

thank u so much for commenting on my poem & thanks for all the suggestions........i look forward to them always & yes i'll work on my mistakes the next time.

thanks,

Prema

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Sweet

Submitted by Pritam on Sat, 06/06/2009 - 18:16.

Hi,

          In brief:Sweet You have expressed an  age-old picture in a new canvas .....I just loved the journey through your thoughts....It is, indeed, a simple and beautiful piece.....keep it up buddy!!

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bravo!!!!!

Submitted by kitu_1602 on Mon, 08/24/2009 - 14:59.

loved it dear....very well written....
and yeah friends really rock!!!
though its hard to find real ones...
but cant imagine life without them....

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so simple

Submitted by lavanya b on Mon, 08/24/2009 - 22:58.

 its simple while u see wrds but do has a great insight and truth which we always never foget evn time make a layer of dust on the memories.

REgards.

LAvanya

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