What did you think of my title? - I liked the title... similar to one of mine "Love or hate"

What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing? - Personally i think there was an artificial attempt to rhyme... that makes a poem sour.

How does this theme appeal to you? Well... since I've already written on it i've hit the wall.. Don't think I'm the best person to answer this therefore.

How was the beginning/ending of the poem? The beginning was interesting... the end was not original

Is the internal logic consistent? Though controversial, the liked the internal logic.

These are my views and therefore not perfect. I hope the poet will take this as constructive criticism

hi !!! thank you amartya for your feedback would take these into consideration next time...

reema...

Hey Reema,

I am sorry but I liked your earlier poem Dreams better than this one. It didnt withstand my attention span throughout. I felt like I was reading a forward message on the mail.

Please don't take it wrong, it's just that you can do much better and you will.. Hope u dint mind my words.

Keep writing!

Vini

 Always love when you are hated and

Always hate when you are loved...

those 2 lines r gud

but i found it wasnt and it looked so shallow not much think abt and ur hate version im aint satisfied dear.

let ur emotions flow dont let dem cntrl ur style rather u can crrct wen its completed then it will be gud one dear.

thank you vinita and lavanya for ur comments i really mean ur words..

Reema..

I like the ending. Watch youor subject -verb agreement: Love andh hate ARE

HATE HAS ]not have]

I think,Reema, that the short poem you  wrote at the end is enough amnd is so powerful that it can stand on its own. The first section   was not as successful. I would just leave thle lshort version at the end: brief andbeautfifully composed.

Joe

dear joe actually this poem i just wrote it without puting any efforts and thinking.. i just kept on writing.. i knw my mistakes dear...

Reema

Then this is worth a redo. People read what you write. Keep it simple,. dramatic and lyrical.

joe

I like this, shows love and hate as opposite sides of the same coin.

thank you dear for you comments..

Reema..