जवाब के खोज में...

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जिंदगी में हसी के साथ साथ ग़म
भी आता हे, कुछ ऐसे पल भी आते हे

जो न किसी से कहा जा सकता हे, नही

कहे बिना रहा जा सकता हे।

बस उन्ही लम्हों की परिणाम हे, की
आदमी एक कवि बन्ने, लिकने लगता हे ।

जब मैंने अपने हालत को एक कविता
के सहारे लोगों के सामने पेश किया,
तब लोगों ने कहा, वह! क्या बात हे!!
इतने दिनों तक हमें पता ही नही था..


पर शायद ही कोई एक होता, जो,
मेरे लेखन को कविता के नज़र
से बहार देखता, तो मेरा कविता
लिखने का कोई मतलब मिलता..</p>

किसी ने मुझे एक बार पुचा,
तुम जो भी लिखते हो, क्या वो सुच हे,
या फिर अपने कप्लानाओ के झलक हे,
जिसे इतनी खूबसूरती से समाते हो...</p>

जवाब तो बस, उसी को देना था...

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- Nocturnal poet
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rockfeather

 you tried it very well but i would like to say you have missed the base alot and it requires lot of edition just read it once agin n check urself dear.

 

here u want to reply to people who asks about ur poetry and u were ansering them but try to put in more simplar way.

 

gud point being exposed,keep it up.

LAvanya

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yeah i know i would have, coz

yeah i know i would have, coz i am not any good at hindi.. just tried a hand leisurely..

"here u want to reply to people who asks about ur poetry and u were ansering them but try to put in more simplar way." sorry to say but i dint get what you meant by this.. could you explain?

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i meant

 i meant the purpose of ur wrk fr which u have written.Truly it gives less hindi touch u need to add some more clarity to it so it would be clear and understandable.all d best

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