Truer Words

Truth247's picture

 Truer Words

 

The words you wrote for me not to see

made me soar so high feel so free.

Please say out loud the way you feel.

Don’t deny your love please make it real.

The love we once had was so strong

that the way you feel can’t be wrong.

If you’re silent from fear of how I’ll be

remember how much you once loved me.

Remember the great times we once had

and how long it took for times to go bad.

If you gave our love just one more try

I promise the great times would never die.

Together we’d live and love the rest of our life

with me as your husband and you as my wife.

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reema's picture

wow

wow.. your wite is very nice i like the way you wrote it in such a simple and sweet manner.. good one

Reema..

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 Thank you Reema

 Thank you Reema

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amartya's picture

Dear Truth24,

Welcome to the Poems & Prose family of friends! 

This is an excellently thought out and very well articulated poem. I particularly loved the logic and the kind of cuteness used to write this! I've had major heartbreaks myself but it never occurred to put it so well, to me; strange!

I would LOVE to see you write again.

Respectfully,
Amartya

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 Thanks Amartya.  I have

 Thanks Amartya.  

 

Mark

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