Tears In The Dust

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Small boy huddled in a corner

He will never question why

He did not dishonour his father

But that did not stop the black eye

*

Little baby all battered and beaten

Can not hide away being bruised

Mother can not stop her drinking

But the baby should not be abused

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Young girl is daddys' pride and joy

She worships him, no one can know

Makes her protect his little secret

Does not listen when she says no

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I look down, crying tears in the dust

In that dust my tears glisten

Knowing that children do not deserve this

Hoping, out there, people will listen

 

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I will start, this comment is

I will start, this comment is now £1.00 please help with your comments for Children In Need.

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Very moving poem, you have a

Very moving poem, you have a great talent!

I too support Children in Need.

I'll Google your blog and follow you on Twitter.

With best wishes from Jimmy Couplet.

 

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Thank you

Thank you, I have a new twitter account. The old one was hacked and deleted. welshpoetcs is the new one

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tears...

"Tears are silent language of grief." - Voltaire

This truly expresses it.

Hope this will help!

 

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Thank you

Many thanks my friend

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For the Kids...

I was very touched by your poem and hope this helps in some small way. Keep up the great writing, it is appreciated.

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Sara L Russell's picture

A very touching poem, This is

A very touching poem,

This is also a great idea to help Children In Need...

Best regards,

Sara.

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hopefully - it will open up eyes

Really a moving poem...

Was totally touched.

I am associated with Adharshila, an NGO is Delhi, India which deals with education adn growth of SLUM children.

That is why I know - this do happens.

This area do need to get acted upon.

Akshat

 

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Thank You

 These verses are beautiful... Unfortunately they are real and it is not easy to just read through them without having the images of those terrible acts stuck in your mind... How can anyone think this is a decent world when every day children get hurt, often by the people they trust the most... Thank You for doing this, you have my full support!!!

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Speaking up for children is so important.

Children are depending on us, and I'd admire your ability to express an agonizing subject with a clear plea for change.  I hope people listen too. Thank-you for speaking up for those children who are suffering from abusive situations.  I hope it helps to shift people's priorities, because it is never acceptable to deliberately harm another human being, especially children who can not defend themselves. 

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Heartbreaking!

Beautiful poem. Heartbreaking truths. God have mercy on the innocent. 

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amartya's picture

Dear Welshpoet

You touched up on a number of children related issues through this little gem of a poem. Child abuse has been discussed a number of times in the community; we are very sensitive towards the issue. I have no idea how a father/guardian can garner enough heart and courage to abuse his dependent; but its a fact and we have to face it. Surprisingly lethal are those pseudo humans. May be the law and the society tend to turn a blind eye over these issues? We need to fight and fight with passion and have got to curb these. Hope you get many comments and thus the impetus reason to utilize the money to launch a direct assault on these menaces.

Best of luck and I admire your initiative.

Gratefully,
Amartya

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Inspiring poem

 I loved it. Great idea to help Children in Need.

Deanna

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Sad, but a beautiful poem.

Sad, but a beautiful poem. Those poor kids in the world that have to go through that every day...its quite depressing...:(

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Icycool's picture

hmmmmm

seems good intresting ...

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Wow, goes straight for the

Wow, goes straight for the heart with this one. Very sad, but horribly enough - extremely true...too many times.  Thanks for sharing your heart. For putting it out there so others that have been there, know they are not alone.

@spreadingjoy

 

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Abuse is not limited to fathers. Mothers, siblings,uncles etc., and non-family, abuse kids and sometimes it is known, sometimes not. Why do I say all that? Kids are equally bewildered why someone who has power over them would hurt them in using the power. I think we should be asking that question about adults to adults also? 

I also mention the other abuse, since we think of the poems conceit, father abusing son, as the model. I have worked with many women who have not been beaten by their mother but feel abused as badly as beatings from the tongue-the emotional abuse. This poem reflects their feelings too. Thanks to whomever is making the donation! 

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Bob...

Welcome to the Poems & Prose family of friends!
Can't agree with you more.. 

Amartya

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CHILDREN IN NEED

 I SUPPORT CHILDREN IN NEED - WHATEVER IT TAKES I'M WITH IT - CHILDREN ALL OVER THE WORLD NEED A CHANCE - VERY NICE POEM!!! - IT MAKES SO MUCH SENSE - 

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 I'll help you (: Great

 I'll help you (:

Great thing, what you're doing

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very sad but moving poem

this poem is sad, but its also sad that its true and its happening to millons of children

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 This poem is powerful.   I

 This poem is powerful.

 

I hope this helps :)

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Thank you

With the comments and views we have so far reached £76 to go towards Children In Need. I have the cheque ready with a blank space for the final total at 12 noon today. I will also being adding a letter with the cheque with the link to the site www.poemsnprose.com and the poem Tears In The Dust. I thank everyone who has given their support and I thank you all so much.

 

Christopher Glyn John Smith (Welshpoet)

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Beautiful

Very sad; but so beautifully written.  I fully support your "Tears in the Dust" and sincerely hope  many hear its message.  God Bless You for sharing...

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Splendid

 It shows the reality and absurdity of life.

 

A very powerful poem.

 

I hope I can help through this comment. Amen.

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Cocoaxx's picture

i love the poem

 sad but true....that's going on in the world 

 

lord bless the children

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For the record...

For the record, I found the following:

22 unique comments 1,167 views (views cannot be unique)

Time: 12:00 hrs GMT 26/10/2009

This is only an observation and the final decision will be take by the author himself. The initiative was taken by the author proactively. Humanity is grateful to people like you... Three cheers to your kindness.

Respectfully,
Amartya

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Many thanks (not including

Many thanks (not including this comment) the grand total fot 5p per view and commentis is £83.75p from all at the site etc. Thank you all for your support and blessings to everyone

 

Chris

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falcon's picture

nice poem

nice poem

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A sad little poem - I do hope

A sad little poem - I do hope you will not be offended when I point out that the singular possive of Daddy in stanza 3 is Daddy's, not Daddys'.

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living with an abusive mother

living with an abusive mother as a child, i have felt some of this pain.

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Wow!

That's very touching and heartfelt. I like what you did with it. You can really stand back and know what those children are feeling. This is a really good poem, sad but amazing.

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 well woteva i had to say abt

 well woteva i had to say abt dis.....awready evvery1 hea has said..hearttouching poem...

 

cnt find nythin 2 say more...very beautifully written poem..

 

n apart 4m dis..da helpin thing for kids..woaah...dats sumthin very genuine..:)

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Thank you

Thank you ; )

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its really very

its really very touching....

and the title is very apt~

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