The football story
This is one of my first stories. Any feedback is needed.
Introduction to characters
Actors:
Announcer
Dianna
Dolphins Team
Christina (part of the Dolphins Team, takes all the credit girl)
Sharks' Coach
Dolphins' Coach
Jess (neighbor)
Dianna's Mom- Note: Parents include both of these people.
Dianna's Dad- Note: Parents include both of these people.
Jess Ally (Dianna's friend)
Johnny (football player, classmate, and Dianna's friend)
Hoson (football player and classmate)
Mrs. Jarred
Mr. Honon
Patti Ho (best friend of Ray, classmate, Dianna's 'friend', and gossip spreader.)
Ray (best friend of Patti Ho, classmate, Dianna's 'friend', and gossip spreader.)
Coach Hosan
(Starts on the field)
Announcer: “She scores! 6 points for the Dolphins!(Bell Rings.) Dolphins have won the game 54-24!”
Dolphins Team-“Yes! We won!”
Christina-( shakes her hair.) “It was all because of me.”
Dolphins Team-"Nice job.”
Dianna-"Thanks.”
Dolphins Team-"You're good.”
Dianna-"Thanks.”
Dianna-(speaking to Sharks' Coach) "Nice job.”
Sharks' Coach- "Thanks. You too.”
Dianna- "Thanks.”
Sharks' Coach- "You're good. Does your school have a football team?”
Dianna- "No, they don't. I've only done football for a month.”
Sharks' Coach- "How did you start?”
Dianna- "Well, my neighbors and I were having a football game. 3 on 3. Girls verses boys. The girls beat them 25-10. Jess, my next-door neighbor, said 'You're good. You should try out for a football team.' So, I asked my parents. They were not sure about it at first, but they looked for a football team.”
Sharks' Coach- "Do you do any other sports?”
Dianna- "No. I'm not very athletic other than P.E., but I've been training ever since I joined the team. I've been running whenever my brother bikes. I keep a bottle of water, just in case, in a case on one of my belt loops.”
Sharks' Coach- "Interesting! Well, I've got to talk to my team. I'll see you later.”
Deanna- "All right then.”
Dolphins' Team- "What was that all about?!”
Christina- "Yeah! What she said.”
Dolphins' Coach- "That's something called sportsmanship. I think you girls have heard of it before. You should do it whether you win or lose.”
(a week later at the neighborhood park)
Jess: "So, Dianna. How's the team?"
Dianna: "It's actually pretty good. We beat the top ranking team of the girl's league, the Sharks. So we're tied with the Seagulls, another football team.(Pause) The school's been talking about doing a middle school football team. If they do that, I'm thinking about signing up for the team."
Jess: (in an excited tone) "That's great! 5 weeks in it and you're already thinking about doing another team. How do you think your mom and dad will feel about it?"
Dianna: "I don't know, but I'm not telling them about it till I'm sure they're doing it."
Chapter 3:
(2 weeks later at Dianna's house)
Dianna: "Mom. Dad. We need to talk."
Parents: "Yes!"
Dianna: "You know I've only been on the team for 7 weeks, but I want to try out for another team."
Mom: "What team?"
Dianna: "The school team."
Dad: "Who's signed up so far?"
Dianna: "Guys."
Mom: "Are you sure you want to join a team with, so far, only boys?"
Dianna: "Yes. I'm sure."
Parents: (unsure tone) ( actor's note:can split parts between mom and dad) "Alright then. But if you want to, I guess we could try it out. "
Chapter 4:
(At school 6 weeks later)
(note: Dianna made the football team 5 weeks ago)
(actor's note: unless indicated, Dianna is now speaking in an upset tone.)
Jess Ally: "Hi there, Dianna."
Dianna: "Hey there, Jess."
Jess Ally: "What's going on?"
Dianna: "It's Coach Hosan doing that "Hosan Speech" again."
Jess Ally: "Not that speech again! How long has been doing that now?!"
Dianna: ( from now on not upset tone)"The next time he does it will be 15 times a week for 5 weeks. Next time will make 75."
Jess Ally: "I just got 1 question. What is the whole point of the speech again?"
Dianna: "To find out where I became athletic."
Jess Ally: "I'm also guessing to find out why the high score."
Dianna: "I'm guessing that has something to do with it too."
Jess Ally: "Dianna, why you just tell him you're involved in another football team?"
Dianna: "I've already tried that."
Jess Ally: "And?"
Dianna: "That's when Coach Hosan's speech about guys should be stronger, faster and better than girls comes in."
Jess Ally: "Who cares if guys should be stronger, faster, and better than girls? That's on average. You have spent 13 weeks perfecting your skill working as hard as you can. Who cares if your coach says you shouldn't?"
Dianna: "One problem, Jess. This is not only the football coach. This is also one of the main middle school coaches. I'm in 8th grade."
Jess: "Yeah. So."
Dianna: "His class is with my class. He has all the girls in my class and his class to back him up. I've got ..."
Jess: (interrupting) "13 weeks of expertise."
Dianna: "As I was saying, I've got nothing. He doesn't care if I've been doing football and training the hardest I can for 13 weeks. He still thinks that I should not be stronger, faster, and/or better than any of the guys."
Jess: "I still say that that coach is using the wrong information. Who cares if you're stronger, faster, and/or better than any of the guys? He should be using the 13 weeks of hardcore training and football practice and give up his point."
Dianna: "I wish it were that simple, but he's not going to give up."
Chapter 5:
(on the field that afternoon)
(actor's note: unless indicated, Dianna is speaking in an upset tone.)
Johnny: "Hey! What's up, girl?"
Dianna: "Hey."
Johnny: "What are you upset about?"
Dianna: "Do you ever get the feeling the coach doesn't want me on the team?"
Johnny: "I think he's just upset period. He's probably upset that you're on the team. I think he wanted this to be an all guys team. Don't think about him. Think about how the rest of the team feels about you."
Dianna: "Johnny, they don't even talk to me any. You're the only person on the team that even bothered to say a word to me."
Johnny: "I bet if you asked, they would say that you should be on this team. You're one of the best players."
Dianna:(a little aggravated) "What do you mean by one?"
Johnny: "Whoops. (whispering) I think you might want to settle it down."
Dianna: (confused tone) "What do you mean by that?"
Johnny: (still whispering) "I think some of the team is aggravated that you're the best of the team."
Hoson: "Hey Johnny! What are you doing over there?! Why are you whispering to Dianna!?"
Johnny: "Nothing that you need to hear!"
Hoson: "Well, then, Get a move on! Practice is in 2 minutes!"
Johnny: "Alright!"
Hoson: "Dianna!"
Dianna: (not upset tone now) "Yes!"
Hoson: "The coach needs to see you!"
Dianna: "Got to go, Johnny."
Johnny: "See ya later, girl."
Chapter 6:
(30 minutes later on the field)
(actor's note: Dianna is extremely mad and sounds it.)</p>
Dianna: "I can't believe that coach can't accept the facts. Why can't he admit that I'm just... better... cause I've been doing hardcore training? Jess accepts it. Why can't he?"
Johnny: "Coach gave you the "Hosan Speech" again?"
Dianna: "Why can't he accept it?"
Johnny: "Like I said earlier, he was intending on it being an all-guys team."
Dianna: "Then why did he get me on the team?"
Johnny: "Now that, I don't know."
Dianna: "If he wanted it to be an all-guys team, he should have said so earlier."
Johnny: "Whoa girl. Chill. I'm not the one you need to be mad at."
Dianna: (a little calmer) "Good point. Maybe I am a little over exaggerating."
Johnny: "Girl. You want to know what I would do. I would talk to Coach Wizer or Mr. Honon. Maybe they could help you. I mean, since Coach Hosan won't listen to you."
Dianna: (not too mad) "I'll talk with the two of them tomorrow."
Johnny: "I'll be asking you about it later, so do it."
Dianna: "I will."
Chapter 7:
(the next day, in Mrs. Jarred's classroom)
Mrs. Jarred: "Dianna."
Dianna: "Yes."
Mrs. Jarred: "Could I speak with you?"
Dianna: "Sure."
Mrs. Jarred: (after a little while) "I've noticed that you and Coach Hosan seem to not get along. What's going on?"
(actor's note: Dianna is now trying to sound persuasive)
Dianna: "Well, remember about 6 weeks ago... when I joined the football team?"
Mrs. Jarred: (listening more intently) "Yeah. Continue."
Dianna: "Well, ever since, I've proved that I am defiantly a good football player."
Mrs. Jarred: "I heard Johnny thinks you're the best."
Dianna: (curious) "When did you hear that?"
Mrs. Jarred: "A week ago. He was talking with some of his friends when he was supposed to be working on an assignment. So, I walked over to hear what he was talking about. One of them sparked the question of who he thought the best player on the team was and Johnny replied 'No offense to the guys, but I have to say the best player, in my opinion, is Dianna.' Someone else said 'Isn't she the only girl on the team?'. He replied 'Yes.' That's when he noticed me."
Dianna: "Well. I think the only reason of that is today makes 13 weeks and 1 day of hardcore training and football practice on another team."
Mrs. Jarred: "So you're involved with another team?"
Dianna: "Yes. It's called The Dolphins' team."
Mrs. Jarred: "What type of team?"
Dianna: "Girls' recreational team."
Mrs. Jarred: "So you had some experience before you joined the team. Right?"
Dianna: "You are correct."
Mrs. Jarred: "That still doesn't answer my question of why Coach Hosan and you almost hate each other."
Dianna: "Because I have more experience, I'm better than the others. Like Johnny said, I'm "the best player", but Coach Hosan strongly believes that the best players should be guys because they're supposed to be "stronger, faster, and/or better than me"."
Mrs. Jarred: "Let me guess. You've been trying to tell him that you've had more experience than the rest of the players, but he won't listen. Right?"
Dianna: "Right."
Mrs. Jarred: "So, what's his prove to say that guys should be "stronger, faster, and/or better" than girls?"
Dianna: "All the girls in his class plus Coach Wizer's class."
Mrs. Jarred: (confused) "Wait a second! Aren't you in Coach Wizer's class?
Dianna: "Yeah."
Mrs. Jarred: "So, has your performance in PE gotten better?"
Dianna: "Well, in my personal opinion, yes. But Coach Wizer hasn't said a word about it."
Mrs. Jarred: "Compare yourself to the others. How are they like compared to you?"
Dianna: "In my personal opinion, there is a big difference. For example, going back to Coach Hosan's "proof", most of the girls in my class hardly put any effort into doing the best they can. Some, on the other hand, put as much effort as they can. However, because those who put in their best effort aren't normally the most athletic, their best effort is the normal stretch plus about a quarter of the activity that we're doing that day before sweat pours down their face. I, on the other hand, can do all the stretches plus all of that day's activity and still hardly break a sweat."
Mrs. Jarred: " That sounds like you're defiantly better. I forgot to mention earlier that I talked with Mr. Honon about that and he said exactly what you said when I asked the same thing."
Dianna: "Well. Then you can say I'm correct in saying that."
Mrs. Jarred: "So why don't you use that as prove?"
Dianna: "You're forgetting one thing, Mrs. Jarred. He won't listen to my proof."
Mrs. Jarred: "How do you know that?"
Dianna: "Because if he had, he would have given up his point."
Mrs. Jarred: "I'm still confused about how you got that."
Dianna: "Well. Think about it. If he had been listening, he would have heard about my training."
Mrs. Jarred: "That's right. Using the girls in the two PE classes would be useless against that. You've had more training that any of them."
Dianna: "But, like I said earlier, he won't listen."
(Mr. Honon walks in, looking confused.)
Mr. Honon: "What are you two talking about?"
Mrs. Jarred: "Dianna and Coach Hosan's argument."
Mr. Honon: "I heard about that. I heard a bystander's and Coach Hosan's side."
Dianna: (confused) "Who was the bystander?"
Mr. Honon: "Someone you would know."
Dianna: (still confused) (little mad tone) "Mr. Honon, that doesn't help. I know a lot of people."
Mr. Honon: "I'll give you a hint. It has something to do with PE."
Dianna: "Sports or non?"
(everyone pauses while Mr. Honon's doing thinking motions (eyes side to side, etc.))
Mr. Honon: "Non."
Dianna: "Coach Wizer?"
Mr. Honon: "You're good. Have you been butting into conversions?"
Dianna: (not confused anymore, but giving Mr. Honon a weird look) "Why would I do that? Butt into teacher conversions? That's a little rude."
Mr. Honon: "I mean from the door."
Dianna: "Still, why would I do that? Speaking of which, what did Coach Hosan say?"
Mr. Honon: "Well, let's just say it sounded like he doesn't like you. A little jealous I could say."
Dianna: "Jealous?!? Why would he be jealous?"
Mr. Honon: "He was commenting, well more like making unappreciative comments, on what Coach Wizer was saying."
Mrs. Jarred: "So were the three of you in the same room?"
Mr. Honon: "At points, yes."
Mrs. Jarred: "I mean when he was doing the "comments"."
Mr. Honon: "No. Actually we were talking about Dianna's PE class performance. After that, when Coach Wizer left, that's when the comments came."
Mrs. Jarred: "So, are you saying that Coach Hosan has an underlying issue with Dianna's performance that he doesn't want to apologize?"
Dianna: "That's what it sounds like."
Mr. Honon: "I'm just saying that he sounds unhappy, kind of jealous. So, I think you should talk to him, Dianna."
Dianna: (outraged) "What do you think I've been trying to do?!?!? He doesn't listen to me. That's what I've been doing all along."
Mr. Honon: "Doesn't listen!? That's outrageous. Coach Hosan always listens."
Dianna: (a little calmer) "Then, why does it seem like he's not listening to me?"
Mrs. Jarred: "Mr. Honon. Dianna. I have a better strategy."
Mr. Honon: "What's that?"
Mrs. Jarred: "Since he seems to be listening to you better than Dianna, why don't you explain the 13 weeks of training and football practice, Mr. Honon?
Dianna: "That sounds like a good plan."
Mr. Honon: (refusing) "And get Coach Hosan to think like I'm for Dianna? No way!"
Dianna: (confused and starting to get mad) "What? Does he think you're against me?"
Mrs. Jarred: "Against you for what?"
Mr. Honon: "Well. Let's just say if he talks to you, he thinks..."
Mrs. Jarred: (interrupting) "He thinks you're against Dianna in some way, right?"
Mr. Honon: (Pause) "Yes."
Mrs. Jarred: "Then, why does he talk to me? I'm for Dianna in every way possible."
Dianna: "Also, why does he talk to Coach Lucky? Isn't she another middle school PE teacher?"
Mr. Honon: "I don't know why for Mrs. Jarred, but I do know that someone has got to get the word about what Coach Wizer is thinking of doing that day and vice versa. I don't think Coach Lucky is against you in any way and you are right about her being a middle school PE teacher. I also know, however, that he doesn't talk with Ms. Honson and Miss. Salton."
Deanna: "That's strange. Miss. Salton is the 7th grade Language Arts teacher and a great teacher. Miss. Honson is defiantly a great teacher, but why the Math teacher to exclude? Wouldn't he exclude Mrs. Jarred first? We hang out the most out of all the kids. Wouldn't that give him a hint that Mrs. Jarred does not hate me in any way?"
Mr. Honon: "I have no clue why."
Chapter 8:
(later in Mrs. Jarred's classroom. a lot of background noise created by classmates.)
Patti Ho: "No way ...She didn't?!?"
Dianna: "What are you girls talking about?"
Ray: (mean tone) "Nothing that you need to know about."
Dianna: "If you say so."
(Dianna shrugs her shoulders and walks away.)
Patti Ho: (continuing with earlier conversation) "Are you serious? I can't believe it. Did she seriously do that?"
Ray: "Ask her yourself. Later please, ok?
Patti Ho: "Why?"
(Ray points to Dianna. Dianna doesn't know about point.)
Mrs. Jarred: "Does that happen often?"
Dianna: "Does what happen often?"
Mrs. Jarred: "Gossip."
Dianna: "It does. I ignore it."
Mrs. Jarred: "But aren't those your friends?"
Dianna: "They aren't the first 'friends' who've done it."
Mrs. Jarred: "Who else?"
Dianna: (whispering) "Livia, Kaya, need I name anyone else?"
Mrs. Jarred: (talking loudly) "Them? Why?"
(classmates (background noise) get quiet and look at Dianna and Mrs. Jarred)
Dianna: (still whispering) "Keep it down!...Now." (now talking) "What y'all staring at?"
(classmates (background noise) gets back to regular conversation)
Dianna: (back to whispering) "Now. Back to what I was saying. Don't tell anyone I said this but ...they've been gossiping to Johnny."
Mrs. Jarred: (whispering) "But why would they talk to Johnny? Don't they know you two are just about, if not exactly, best friends?"
Dianna: "Haven't you seen the three of them? They were best friends long before I even started doing football. So who's the first person they're going to tell the latest gossip to? Johnny. Who eventually tells me the latest gossip regarding me? Johnny. I am informed of the latest things so... I know what to do if someone says certain things about me."
Mrs. Jarred: (still whispering) "Convenient. Does anyone other than you, Johnny, and now me, know about it?"
Dianna: "That's why you need to keep quiet. If anyone finds out about it, they won't tell Johnny anymore."
Mrs. Jarred: "Got it. My lips...are sealed."
Chapter 9:
(in Mrs. Jarred's classroom, about an hour later)
Mrs. Jarred: "You have a good day everyone."
(Mr. Honon comes running in the classroom. After he gets in, he is panting and out of energy. He looks like he is worn out, but is there for a reason.)
Dianna: "What's wrong, Mr. Honon?"
Mr. Honon: (panting and pausing every so often) "Dianna... I think... you need... to hear something."
Mrs. Jarred and Dianna: (at the same time) "What's wrong?!?"
Mr. Honon: (getting this out in one breath) "I just heard from Coach Lucky about something.
Dianna: (extremely concerned) What is it?"
Mr. Honon: (sounds extremely worried but has got his breath mostly back) Dianna, be extremely careful when you apporach anyone form the PE department except for Coach Lucky.
Mrs. Jarred: Why should she?"
Dianna: (still extremely concerned) Is there some sort of rumor going around that the PE department beleives?"
Patti Ho: I'm sorry to interupt, but...
(At this point, Ray knows exactly what Patti Ho is about to say and tries to get out of the classroom.)
Mrs. Jarred: Hold on, Ray. I haven't dismissed anyone yet.
Dianna: (confused) "Yeah. What's the big rush?"
(Ray knows she's been caught and looks and sounds worried until otherwise indicated.)
Ray: "Well...
(All of the sudden, Johnny come busting in the door. He looks like he's worried either about himself or someone else.)
Johnny: "Mrs. Jarred, Mr. Honon, whatever you do, do not tell Coach Honon that Dianna and I are in here."
(Sounds of feet are heard outside the door.)
Johnny: "Dianna, hide. Where's a good hiding place when you need one?"
Dianna: "What's the matter, Johnny?
Johnny: "Just hide and don't speak a word.
Dianna: "No."
Johnny: "Then help me find a hiding place."
(Mrs. Jarred leads Johnny into the closet.)
Mrs. Jarred: That should do.
Johnny: Thanks.
(Johnny slams the door of the closet. Mr. Honon looks like he's anticipating something bad. Dianna is confused and extremely worried. Coach Hosan comes in the door. Mr. Honon almost faints. Mrs. Jarred grabs a chair for Mr. Honon to sit in. He sits, looking like he's fainted. Coach Hosan looks and sounds mad.)
Coach Hosan: Where is Johnny?
Dianna: What's the matter, coach?
Coach Hosan: That's none of your business. Now, where is he!?!?
Dianna: I won't tell you unless you tell me three things. First, why do even need Johnny? Second, what's got you this mad? Third, what is going on here?
Coach Hosan: Girl, enough of your nonsense. Somebody, anybody, where is Johnny?
Dianna: (now sounds about as mad as Coach Hosan) First off, my name is Dianna and you should that fairly well. Second, Answer my questions because, (a little calmer) like you, (back to being mad) I've had enough of your nonsense.
( Everyone is extremely quiet, not about to say a word (for they know now is not the right time), and intensely watching this.)
Coach Hosan: I don't care about what you think! Your nonsense will not be tolerated. Now could someone tell me where Johnny is!
Dianna: (now has the most frustrated tone she's ever had and anyone's ever heard from either of them) Coach Hosan, is this the way you treat your students or are you just treating me like this because of our arguement? Becuase if it is, I quit!
( Everyone is staring at Dianna. Johnny has finally come out of his hiding place.)
Johnny: You can't just quit! The team needs you.
Dianna: (still in frustrated tone, but a little calm since talking to Johnny) Johnny, think about it. Ever since I joined the team, it's been conflict all over the place. Now, the PE department hates me, Coach Hosan sounds like he hates Coach Wizer, Mrs. Salton, and Miss. Honson, and Coach Hosan's mad as a flaming beast at you. All since I joined the team. And it's all probably because I joined the team. Johnny, this is my only way. Nothing else has worked. I think it would be better for the team and the school. And if the team needs me, tell them to stop gossiping and saying bad things about me right in my face! (The whole team walks into Mrs. Jarred's room.) They don't need me. You need me, and I'm sorry. I'll hand in my stuff this afternoon right after school.
Mrs. Jarred: I will not allow this. Girl, you've been telling me how much you loved being on a team that challenges you.
Hoson: Wait a second. We challenge you?
Dianna: That's right, Hoson. Mrs. Jarred, like I said to Johnny, I've caused conflict all over the place. I think it's the right thing to do. It's not the easiest, but, since nothing else has worked, it's the best thing to do. Hoson, think about it. You guys are just that. A bunch of guys who, before my very intense training, were, stronger, faster, and better than me at any sport. The only reason you still aren't is because, first, you guys don't normally, at least not to my knowledge, do very intense training and, second, I'm still training very hard. When you guys practice, in order for me to keep up, I have to try harder. Trust me. I outbeat any girl on the Dolphins' 20 or 30 to 1. The whole team can go against me and I would still win. However, with you guys, remember, two or three of you can tackle me down. That's what motivates me. That low of a number means that, if either of the two I said earlier were to change, I might lose my position and status and to tell you the truth, I kind of like the fact about being the best because that means, first, I devolop more friends with guys because I can, like you guys say, "kick butt" which means I'm good at sports. And second, I can teach people, like you guys, and you'll probably listen.
Hoson: I never thought of it that way. I guess it is better that you're better than us. It not only motivates you, but it motivates us because it's kind of hard to tell people that a girl is the best on your team. I mean, it's you, but when people don't know you, Dianna, it's kind of hard to tell them that.
Dianna: I just thought of something. Maybe the reason there was so much gossip and conflict is because people, instead of trying to learn how to get better at football, went around complaining to people. Also, I think the stereotype needs to stop and the listening needs to get better. Because, as I just proved, there's a reason why I'm as good as I am.
Johnny: I have a solution. Maybe if the football team would start fixing those three, particularly stereotyping, we would have a better team and less conflicts, meaning more bonds. If you agree, place your hand in the center and say "I".
Dianna: I.
Hoson: I
The rest of the team except Coach Hoson: I
Mrs. Jarred: Do you mind if others outside the team join in?
Dianna and Johnny: (At the same time) Not a problem.
Mrs. Jarred: Then I.
Dianna: Coach Hoson?
Coach Hoson: Alright. I.
Patti Ho: I.
Mr. Honon: I.
Ray: I.
Dianna: Livia, Kaya?
Livia and Kaya: I.
Johnny: On three, we say unity. 1,2,3.
Everyone there: Unity!
Chapter 10:
(two weeks later, outside on the school yard)
Jess (Ally): So, how's everything?
Dianna: Absolutely fantastic.
Jess: So you enjoy being off the team?
Dianna: Jess, where did you hear that?
Jess: All of Miss. Salton's last period class said that you screamed that you're quitting.
Dianna: I did, but I changed that.
Jess: After?
Dianna: After the whole football team argeed to never stereotype or go spreading gossip about something you're mad at.
Jess: So you're still on the football team?
Dianna: That and all of the teachers are no longer having conflicts because of me. Plus, the PE department doesn't hate me anymore.
Jess: And your teammates?
Dianna: All of us are working extremely hard. In fact, I'm worried that in a couple of weeks, I may not be the best player.
Jess: And the Dolphins?
Dianna: Well, let's just say that they are harder to persuade. I'm still the best player on that team by a long shot and getting better by the minute.
Jess: Sounds like everything's going good for you.
Dianna: It is.
Like I said earlier, any feedback is needed, particurally about the chapters. What do you think? Too much, too little, just right?
Language:
English
(1 vote)
Dear De..
Nice play write and very dramatic. As a first draft I see a fantastic drama getting formed here. In my opinion we need to work on it a little more though
Points: (Few, mostly inconsequential and personal opinions)
Proof reading: (I know that the following mistakes happened because the author wrote this while chatting with me and did not get the time to proof read it before.)
Chapter 6:
Mrs. Jarred: "So why don't you use that as prove?" [proof] or [So why don't you use that and prove?]
Chapter 8:
(Ray points to Dianna. Dianna doesn't know about point.) [the point]
Chapter 9:
First off, my name is Dianna and you should [know] that fairly well.
Otherwise we have a nice barrelful there which is still brewing. Brew it well and the product will be a masterpiece.
Respectfully,
Amartya